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NaPoWriMo #1 – shuffle a poem
If I kept a diary,
like a lonesome schoolgirl,
I might write
‘Friday – I’m in love with the
boy from down the road.’
But not because he is faithful, shooter
of midnight firecrackers,
of stolen guns ,
or that I see him
slipping back from windows
like curtains in the hot breeze, or
in church rolling the prayer off his tongue
with sounds
as full as
olives
bouncing in the jar.
But more because he waits
at the roadside,
a sombre reptile,
watching the hours pass
on the highway, kind enough
not to flinch in the
swirls of sand,
and lets me dance in his shadow
as it stretches to the East
to touch the rising night.
From the song titles “Faithful Shooter” by Richard Buckner, “Friday, I’m In Love” by The Cure, “Highway Kind” by Townes Van Zandt, “The Prayer” by Bloc Party and “Sombre Reptile” by Brian Eno
Hi, Terri. I like your evocative storytelling. And "sounds as full as olives..." is a brilliant image. I invite you to discover my work on the NaPoWriMo 2010 page at www.gregoconnell.com - Greg =)
ReplyDeleteAgreed on the olives image, and the sombre reptile works surprisingly well. Sombre seems the perfect word for, say, an iguana sunning itself, all perpetual scaly frown etc. Lovely stuff, and thank you for the note.
ReplyDeleteThis is very pretty...
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